This was an enjoyable little freebie, actually turned out longer than I expected. It felt a little bit like two short stories in a series as opposed to the part one-part two it was presented as, but that's fine.
Part I: This is basically the story blurb and I really liked it. My one complaint is that I don't think Leo was at all necessary. He was added to insert some drama into the story but it felt forced and I would have preferred to just have Danny and Moose's story unfold on it's own.
Part II: I was fine with this plot twist, but as I said, it felt more like a sequel. It was just a lot to squeeze in.
My only general complaint is that the dialogue is a little juvenile at times and cheesy, but I liked the story enough that I just took it for what it was and it didn't bother me too much.